Originally Posted by "TampaStan" Good
Hi Mike & Thanks for Doing This, ya Kind Soul!

Here's about the ONLY one I got easy-access to...a nice Co- with Mark Schuessler, "You Saved Me". It's hearable at Mark's Pop-Rock Site at Soundclick...(I've forgotten the URL..sorry!) <www.Soundclick.com> then search "Mark Schuessler"...should work.

Lyrics below, Vocals & Arrangement & Recording's by Mark.

"You Saved Me" (C) 2009 by Good & Schuessler BMI

I was so blind I could not see
This world's dead weight was killing me
Knee-deep in dreams that died
Until you rallied by my side

(CHORUS)
Yes, I was lost but then you found me, found me, Baby you found me..
You came and wrapped your arms around me, 'round me, Love all around me..
Now I thank God for what you gave me, gave me, Oh what you gave me..
Baby..YOU SAVED ME!--

My high-hopes piled up in the dust
Those big plans for the two of us
And as they vanished in the wind
You helped me find my feet again..

(REPEAT CHORUS)

(BRIDGE)
Oh, I was wrong, I can't go on..on my own
No man is ever strong-enough...Alone...

(CHORUS OUT)

Hope ya likes it, & Thanks for Listening & For Your Time, Amigo!
Best Wishes/Big Guy-Hug,
Stan & Mark


Stan
JPF Mp3 Boards



Dear Stan,

Thanks for submitting "You Saved Me"
I feel this pretty song has lots of potential. The piano was very alluring and the chorus was beginning to grow on me as the song progressed. The repetition of the words had a nice rhythm to
them,following the hooky piano.

With some slight work on phrasing and a more rangier vocalist to execute these melodies and alter them some the musical aspect of this song can work out wonderfully.

There is more snags to work out involving the lyrics. They just
aren't contemporary for one thing. A bit dated feeling,a touch dramatic when combined with the music style maybe a bit poetic. Nothing really popping out.

I feel the second verse was better than the first, it would be a great move to start with it and re-do the first verse as the new second verse. That verse felt more contemporary and i can hear it
in a few styles of songs including Rock or R&B. Maybe it was a combination of the lyric with the singing musical style that gave me an older song vibe.

I have seen Josh Grobin's lyrics and I wouldn't have accepted a single song of his based on them. So if he gets his hands on this and belts it out all over the place with mass production you got a hit...

Not trying to degrade what you have here, I do appreciate the work. But maybe that's the way to approach this song to sell it. Get the best singer you possibly can afford and rework some melodies so they are less restricted. Do a bigger production as well.

I feel the second verse was better than the first, it would be a nice move to start with it and re-do the first verse as the new second verse. That verse felt more contemporary and i can hear it
in a few styles of song including Rock.

Maybe I think the words dead,died,rallied, didn't gel with me.

I heard a song recently where the lyric was

When it's gone
Any tragedy won't matter
Ebb and flow
Running from the empty room
When one depends on two

All I kept thinking was "When one depends on two"

That line really popped out for me, what a great line! It has a double meaning,few ways to take it, it's unique and made me think.

I think you have a great potential for something strong here.
I would re-visit it and make it the hit it could be.

Thanks
Mr Knowitall
Sublevel Muisc NYC

Thanks!
Peace Mike
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