Originally Posted by Louis
Hi again Mr. Know-it-all... I'm a glutton for punishment, lol.. I was just wondering if this new tune is more in line to what your looking for. Trying a different direction.

"I Don't"

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=100639&songID=8469441


she wants to hear I do
but I don't
she wants to buy a little house
but I won't

I don't know why she wants
to spoil a good thing
we were getting by fine
without a ring
I don't see a white picket fence
in my dreams
and pickin curtains out
just ain't me
she wants to hear I do
but I don't


she wants to change everything
but I don't
she wants to shop for the ring
but I won't

I don't know why she wants
to spoil a good thing
we were getting by fine
without a ring
I don't see a white picket fence
in my dreams
and pickin curtains out
just ain't me
she wants to hear I do
but I don'



Louis Twinn
JPF Mp3 Boards




Hi Louis,

Thanks for the recent submission. This was very well crafted and I liked the idea alot. Close,very close,it just feels incomplete. It really needs a chorus to compliment the wonderful verse. Not enough impact or variations.
The song was not ready to pitch, but is very worth developing.

Sincerely
Mr Knowitall
Sublevel Music NYC

Thanks!
Peace Mike
Sub

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