Dear Mr. Knowitall,

I see that you are running out of new songs to review and have found few hits! While my first submission did not catch your ear, if you are willing to listen to a second one from me, I am sure you will have a hit on your hands, even though it is in the Adult Contemporary genre rather than hip hop, teenie-pop or country.

This is a Florida beach song called Folks on Treasure Island.

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Folks on Treasure Island Copyright © 2009 Colin Ward

V1
Fat guy sittin' on a park bench,
Shorts hang below his knees,
Hair down his back to his plumber's crack,
Looks like he's taking it easy,
Waiting for a bus

V2
A pickup truck full of people,
Coming from the beach all wet,
Carrying signs, protesting the times,
Something has got 'em upset,
Hope it's not us

CHORUS
Folks on Treasure Island,
Soaking up the Florida sun,
Kids with curls and boys with girls,
The beach is where they've come,
To kick up a fuss

V3
Bikini strolling the sidewalk,
Guys all stop and stare,
Pink on her back, stamp like a tramp,
Pretendin' she don't care,
Who can she trust?

CHORUS

INSTRUMENTAL

Br
Hair of blue and silver,
Living their memories,
Walking with a cane, ignoring their pain,
Loving the sun and the breeze,
Soon be back on the bus

CHORUS

Last edited by Colin Ward; 12/11/09 12:10 PM.
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