Originally Posted by Joice Marie
okay Mikey ....here's my spin smile

rough, yes !

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Maybe you'll see me at last
Realizing I am the best
Take off those dark glasses
See me with new eyes, yeahhhh

'cause I am waiting for you

and I will be there
I will be there
I will be there
I will be there
Waiting for you



Hi Joice

Almost missed this post. Your opening melody is similar to my original idea as well.
A few of us have picked up on that chord move and incorporated into the melody.

I liked all your chorus line melodies.. the high note on best was cool
I really loved the last "waiting for you" in the chorus melody.

The way you dropped down on that... maybe it should start the chorus with that melody, and climb.. very effective.

For this vibe your melody and phrasings have it over the lyric content as of now.

I liked your drive on the end tag section as well. but I'm thinking a whole line instead of of a repeated phrase,, the same few words over & over again.

A few of us have done that now and I'm thinking since the whole band is doing that musically the vocalsit could flow a little in that section to be slightly opposite.

Great work Joice really! you surprised me in this genre as well.....

Thanks!
Peace Mike
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