Originally Posted by Kathy Bampfield
Hey guys,

Happy Sunday.... smile

I was working on this a bit more today....changed it up from what I had...trying to lead it towards the takeaway..(hook)
I've been looking at the hook as the one line sentence that we want people to takeaway with them when the listener is done...It actually helps, instead of referring to the chorus as "the why".


You carved your name on my heart
like an autograph
left ink on my skin
now fading fast
said you need time and space
clearing your head
You deserve better
then what I'm givin'

No disillusion here it's two sets of expectations
No excuses with this save all the accusations

Let me, let me
let you
Down Easy
you say you love me I'll stay in touch
?
let me let me
let you
Down Easy

I'll keep changing it as i think about.....Just more thoughts....



Hi Kathy

I see you are the fisrt one to incorporate my opening lyric ideas, cool... thanks!
I do like that line I have never forgotten them without writing them down in four years.... smile

I like the lyrical adjustments... do you have the new melody & add ons up on Soundclick?

Tripp (my wife) were discussing your submission today as well as others.
So far your lyric concepts have been the closest overall... especially since you have the Title so far for sure...

Remember how I was saying we don't want to use the
I want you
I need you...... thing?

Tripp suggested the slight change of direction:

I want to
I need to
Let you down easy
But you won't let me - etc......

Outline - being how someone is having a very hard time letting the other person go.

Something along those lines, is pretty cool.. I thought. just some ideas to fool with.

Like how I was talking about the "Ink" maybe this guy or girl tatooed your name on there arm... Very hard to break away from that person! Hmmm



Thanks!
Peace Mike
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