Hi Moker

Much better lyrical images on this one, for fitting this song, I think somehwre in between your first version and this may be a good place. I can't explain!

I liked this one

like a stone is crushed to dust
there is nothing left of us


this one is too forced, like trying to make metal smile

so this is the end of our feast
the feeding off each other like a beast


It's very hard to explain what's not right all the time, when something hits ya it just hits ya.
The melody is so huge in all this, that's what helps determine the best way to go.



Thanks!
Peace Mike
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