Hey Sub,

Thanks dude. Yeah, it's not nailed, just in the ballpark. I've listened to the other submissions, and obviosly melody will be dictated by song structure. Tried a couple of inversions, but they came out standard boring.

This song will dictate he terms, so needs to be done in a classical way. The Set Up, The Conflict, and the Resolution.

The song itself has legs, and with the right vibe, and killer hook, will be a winner.

Do you want folks to keep working, or have you chosen something which you find suitable. I actually enjoy the process and the journey, rather than the conclusion, and am happy to flesh it out if need be. Let us know.

cheers, niteshift

PS- I think the chorus needs a U2/INXS repetitive guitar riff in a higher register, at the point where it repeats, to lift the chorus up, and then dunp it back down to the verse.


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