Originally Posted by Linda Adams
Hiya Mike!
Thank you!!
I'm a freelance editor in my "other life" and the biggest thing I've noticed about whether a story writer will succeed is whether they can LISTEN TO and IMPLEMENT suggestions. For myself, I have *RARELY* listened to an editor's advice and *not* had my story improve as a result. Same thing works in music.

And I told ya I just needed to learn my own tune a little better. wink

OK - as for the chorus - I do play with melody ideas a bit while I'm writing/composing, until I decide which way I like it best.
I *know* your timing is dead-on perfect - you're amazing.
So.... which chorus did you like better? ...and I'll copy that one over.

I can do a quick copy/paste sort of edit this week, but a complete redo will have to wait till next week. I have a solo coming up for a church function next week that I haven't learned yet (just got the music) so that's going to take up my time for a while.

Thanks for the "groove" compliment too. Steve (my hubby) liked how it felt like it was cycling round and round. And yeah, I was going for a Heart feel, so, yay!

Linda

Originally Posted by Mike Caro Substudio
Linda,

Much much much better!!!! Wow now that's taking some suggestions and doing something about it. Night and day difference,



Linda -

Okay yes the last chorus before the very ending is the most solid one I think and unique.

Try to get the timing better in the first verse you come in in the wrong place, by the middle of it the second half you strat to lock it in...

Watch a little on the pre-chorus sections The "Under Pressure" melody vibe is becoming to dominant and noticable, alter it slightly or as I say "hide it a little more " lol....

Great work! and don't neglect your responsibilties doing this, like I am!
it will be here, go now! lol....

Thanks!

Thanks!
Peace Mike
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