Hi Kathy,

Your a slick one you are you are smile

For an instant at the top I thought you were gonna sing my orignal melody idea
to that lyric concept without ever hearing me lol... Almost! for a second.

I think it;s getting better ceratinly in a more thorough way. I like dyour voice in the upper range in the chorus, but I still like that mellow soft seductive sound of the lower register as well, in I want to, I need to..... Oh also I'm glad you like that suggestions on the lyrics enough to try it out...

The pre-chorus started out very cool sounding then lost its groove maye a ouch too long. Boy this is hard right?

Maybe the chorus can start in the low register and lift for the second half???

This is good work Kathy I'm having such a blast checking these out.

Overall the main thing would be better meter and pocket for the melodies.
Still a great chorus contender here and the title is 90% a definite unless someones lyrics make us think other wise. smile

Thanks!
Peace Mike
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