Originally Posted by Michele Bolton
Hi Mike

This is just some of our song, the way we hear this song.
It sounds nothing like the way you sing, the short version Mike.

What do you think, we still have lots more work to do on it, this is just a little of it. The idea!


You Rock My World!

Verse

The first time I saw you, my heart just stopped
My eyes could see, it's you that I want
Your beautiful smile, your strawberry red hair
Those cute little freckles, that match your hair

Chorus 1

Baby, you drive me crazy, you rock my world
Together, hold my hand baby, we'll rock the world
When, your lips touch mine, my world turns
Baby, your driving me crazy, you rock my world


Verse


Chorus 2

Baby, you drive me crazy, you rock my world
Together, hold my hand baby, we'll rock the world
When, your body touches mine, ohhhhhhhhh
Baby, your driving me crazy, you rock my world

Michele grin
Aussie girl from down under

Copyright March 2008



Hi Michele

I'm still here smile I'm never too far away lol...

Okay -

I liked the first few lines very much, then you lost it on the last line.

The first time I saw you, my heart just stopped
My eyes could see, it's you that I want
Your beautiful smile, your strawberry red hair
Those cute little freckles, that match your hair

The whole song is a little softer & nicer than what i was looking for but still flowed nicely. But the last line I would change.

The chorus had a good flow also... everything seemed singable.
The "Rock My World" concept is a good one but not for this piece I don't feel.

I know you have more to do with it.. and I'm glad you guys are involved and working and having fun smile

Thanks!
Peace Mike
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