Originally Posted by PeteG
Here's my entry Mike. I had a lot of fun with this! Thanks for making it available.

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6336171

Gigantic

Here comes that feeling again
Cant stop the waves from crashing in

chorus
I's so Gigantic, so Awesome, Titanic
I feel like I could lose control (of my heart and soul)
'Cause its so Gigantic, way over romantic
Why did you do this to me (can't you see)
Sometimes I wish that I could
Take control and make this feeling stop

Pete Gallatin 2008


Mr Pete - WOW! you shocked me a bit there brother... some VERY cool stuff.

Okay you lost the meter some, it kinda got away from you. It needed to shorten some things here and add some things there. Some of those follow vocals were slamming, meaning (cool) smile

Then some were slightly too much, like it needed a touch of space.

The end tag was GREAT but the last line feel too long and did end on a good sound..
Meaning the choice of how a word sounds in a certain place.. I have struggles greatly with that last line as well. Do you know the working lyric I have there is
Are you ready? - "Goodbye" lol... It actually works great and what better word to end with... but when you do something a little hokey or odd you have to support
it.. give it a coll reason for being there... tha's one of my made up rules smile

Pete - Yours is running very high on the list along with a few others.

I'm impressed.. now I'll go back and look at the lyrics some your melody didn't even make me think about what you were saying at all. JUST LIKE ALL RADIO HITS smile

Are we learning some things first hand, hands on I should say folks?

Thanks!
Peace Mike
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