Paul - No problem & thanks for pitching in here all the time...
I agree with you about Petes ideas as well.

Michele - Very glad to see you here smile look forawrd to what you guys come up with

Two cups of coffee $1.50
A note book and pen $2.00
Working on a song with a loved one - PRICELESS

Ted - Tarnation Ted lol.... No one is getting beat up in the early & mid rounds of this fight worse than Ted, Ya know why? Tha'sts because he keeps coming and WON'T Go DOWN EASY smile

MUCH Better Ted,

The second time you sing "slice my way away from you" that melody is really good.

The whole chorus is way better,

I would change

Watching you carve your name…on my chest
I’m depressed…and obsessed…
It’s a bloody shame


Those lines and phrasing distracted from your other hooks.

I started to get a Journey vibe from this one Ted.. I could almost hear Steve Perry singing this chorus, How wild... Now you got me thinking like Mark had me thinking about the Eagles type style.... now you have cooler words but your melody is so pretty it's making the words like Slice seem odd smile Boy am I a pain in the....

Ted you are way to cool.....

My friends come here and write songs sometimes, I terrorize them as well, WORSE!
But first I torture ME..
That is why I sometimes refer to myself as "Osama Been Writing" song terrorist. smile

Thanks!
Peace Mike
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